Ok:
1. That was you walking around focusing the camera and just filming a piece. If you want to do it like that you may aswell just take photos.
2. If you're going to film it and document graffiti it needs to have more interest:
Cut out the bits of you walking and focusing the camera
Music- the sound of you walking isn't very interesting- surely if you're making a video you want to use everything to make an impact have some sound.
If not maybe talk about the location, or your knowledge of the artists and pieces, maybe find someone and play an interview with them on the background.
3. Good stuff- that was a nice location with good pieces. You got good shots of the pieces.

 

Also I'm not sayin cut out everything that isn't a piece, keep some in so people can get a sense of the location.

 

Yeah that's true. More graffiti and less walking around. I could re-edit the whole video to include music in some parts but I also want to capture the entire atmosphere of the place. I should go back there and film it again so there wouldn't be those scratch noises which sucks

 

You don't need to re record it. Just turn the sound of and play some new sound. yeah it's good to capture the whole thing to get a sense of the place.

 

Looks like a dope spot, did not watch it all but really not feeling the pieces there so much. I think people want to be entertained by vids so the idea of adding some type of background music in parts or throughout is good. I don't mind so much all those crunchy floor noises, that's real world feel for when you step into an abandoned torn up spot, but not the whole way through. You might also want to watch some of the graf vids that paved the way for everyting after, stuff like Video Graf, GTV, of course Style Wars, sure you can Youtube most of this.

 

I mean like do a little bit of walking in between, but when you're doing that cut forward through the scene like ten to twenty seconds every few seconds of raw walking just so it looks cooler. And I don't know if you want to do this but if I was you I would talk a little about graffiti in general, I mean like what it means to you or about your city, or about the types of spots people bomb with tons of graff; I mean you aren't going to run out of topics to talk about regarding this sub culture you don't need a crew to go into depth and get some cool footage of your city while your at it.

Like if you want to make it cinematic get some footage out of the side of a car and look around at some stuff in between showing specific pieces or like take some footage from a high spot at night where all the cars are driving and accelerate the footage for a few seconds before cutting back to the conversation or blasting music over it.

I briefly took a film class when I was in high school and one of the largest things I took away from it was that movies are almost more than anything else a manipulation of time. And that's just what you have to do, learning video software isn't that hard try lightworks or something like that bro I know you'll be able to rock some cool footage if you're passionate about it. Do a brief study for a week on taking cool video and photograph and you'll understand the aesthetics people expect in any production worth being called a documentary. But most of all have fun with it

 

I spent whole evening re editing the video and it starts to look a lot better. Cutting unnecessary parts and adding music makes the difference. I thought about adding some speech but I think that the video content isn't suitable for that because there would be so much going on at the same time. The viewer concentrates on one target at time and me talking the same time as new pieces show up would make it troubled. I hoped I was able to publish the video now but there was a problem. It took couple hours to render the video for me to notice that the audio levels were completely fucked. The new version will hopefully be out as soon as possible.

 

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dont listen to the people saying "talk about the graffiti". FUCK THAT.

if you gonna make a vid like this, start with an opening shot of the building, from the out side, then film while you walkin up to it, then through like you did. music or not, the bits with shitty graffiti, which in this case was 3/4 of the video, speed those parts up. the parts with good graffiti, slow those parts down so people look at the pieces longer.

if youre a comedian go ahead and speak..... but for the love of god, please, please dont be one of those shmucks who film a spot and talk the whole time about "art".

 

Here is the re edited version. Tell me what you think


And this is the second part

 

Quality. Dark with dramatic music was good.

 

So legit, excellent job man. Perfect tunes for the vibes you wanted and everything.

 

Still needs work, but much improved with your changes. !st video is kind of better than the 2nd, although I didn't watch either the whole way through. 2nd video needed the music to come in sooner. Also too dark, you need a head lamp, flashlight, or something to help with the lighting. Last thing, the graf in these vids is pretty shitty, need to get some shots of good quality pieces.

 

Crits on the video editin? What do you guys like and don't like about this video? Big af project to do i actually did both sides and another video is coming soon for the other side.

 

You should have watched both videos completely. The second video has a lot of nice graffiti in the end. Also the first video has some very nice pieces for example 3:36 there is a piece made by the legend Atak. Also finnish graffiti style is way different from rest of the world.

 

What makes it so different?

 

Hey man you want an artist to ask questions I can be interviewed by you if you want

 

No, I shouldn't have. People are not going to watch your video simply because you made it, and they're also not going to fast forward through minute after minute in search of the possible one good piece in there. When people watch a graf video they're expecting to see good shit, not 5 minutes of toy action. You're off to a good start, but you need to hit a fame spot and get some better graf. Finnish graf has slight differences to it, true, but you can still tell the difference between good and toy.

 

Nice work. Not into the music but that's personal taste I guess. Might shorten the video time a bit for what you showed.