Dont do one liners and lose all the extra stuff. You should stick to a pen and paper for now cuz that looks like dog shit but atleast your second time writing cant be worse than your first. Start simple and you'll improve faster.
What's it suppose to say? i can't read it right. That's your first problem, legibility,, you're trying to run before you can walk. take the details down some notches. make it as legible as you can.
Try different letter shapes, you've used the same E like 60 times. Most of the time the loop on the R extends past your baseline which you don't want and the letter A isn't a crescent moon
Nobody ever gave there opinion on mine. ..since were on the topic, I'm ok with it but I feel like it needs more of a slang feel ya know
I like it overall, sorry for crappy quality, just used my fingers on the phone editor. but just lines for stroke direction. Biggest thing was that E is too small and leaves some weird gaps and just making sure you carry your baseline throughout and matching elements. I also suck at this so take my advice with a grain of salt.