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Discussion in 'Toys forum' started by Kayone707, Jun 15, 2005.

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  1. From the Ground Up

    From the Ground Up Senior Member

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    ok i didnt really get any crits on the last page so bump....what do you like/dislike (apart from asb)??
     
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  2. silentchaos14

    silentchaos14 Elite Member

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  3. c0ld

    c0ld Senior Member

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    MORNE its not too bad.

    try making the r the same width as the rest.

    also make sure the middle connecting part of the M is straight.

    and try using a ruler lol.


    critz on these plz?

    ve been critting all day but havent gotten any yet........

    old style im thinkin abt goin back to....
    [Broken External Image]:http://img248.imageshack.us/img248/7255/imag0003op9td0.jpg


    out of all the ones with the new style, i like this one best.
    [Broken External Image]:http://img529.imageshack.us/img529/1406/newsty2xr2.jpg

    whatcha think?


    critz plz.
     
  4. rayseone

    rayseone Senior Member

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    tasty - ill shiiit, thats what having a good handy does to you kids, honestly, ive never really seen anything from you apart from handys and i gotta say that stuff is illll

    ground up - well you should maybe use bars, it will help you alot more, and if you are using them, which it kinda looks evident in some cases, reread how to use em cuz they honestly look fucking shit right now, just kepp gonig you will get it.

    cold- you really dont even need a style where you are at, do some blocks get structure down, lean em left lean em right experiment with sizes and overlappin and stuff, if anything go back to your so called old style its 50 times better than the shit your doing now. but forreal you dont nned a style for a long time, quit it with the new shit it fucking licks balls

    morne - keep wokring with them blocks, you are getting better, your R is a bit small but the structure is okay on it, i would say try getting some curves or some shit in just make it a lil bit more stylish

    guest - where the fuck were u man i missed your stuff, oh well dope shit none the less, the S is kinda wierd tho

    capo - im kinda likin that top one, but the bottom one haha, im in loveee with that elephant
     
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  5. Dr. Kazer

    Dr. Kazer Senior Member

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    Working on some new letters. Crits please
     
  6. ticonderoga

    ticonderoga Member

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    AMK nd Tasty sick shit man nice styles
     
  7. Captain

    Captain Senior Member

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    - morne, do that without having sketchy lines; make full strokes. try out some letter tweaks too, it looks like you know structure. learn flow.

    - cold, keep going, little more flow and structure.

    - kazer, go back to bars and semi-simples.(flow 'em, don't do extensions though)

    - aver, it looks good, work more on flow though.

    - drak, scrap that. period.

    - larrson, see my advice to kazer.

    - guest, your shit destroys mine. 'nuff said.

    - ground up, don't color shit or really finish shit for now, finish up at a final lining, and show us that. Use bars.

    - taste, paint the last one IMO.

    It would seem that my sketch skills have gone to hell over the summer.
    To demonstrate my point, penstyle with some highlighter:

    [Broken External Image]:http://img210.imageshack.us/img210/7854/masvx1.jpg

    ignore the whack handie, my friend did that.
     
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  8. Nem

    Nem Elite Member

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    I would either paint the 2nd one down or the 4th one down. the 2nd one because its nicely proportioned, and just overall sick.

    or the 4th one because each letter there is just executed beautifully. maybe try to make the first T on that one a bit taller.
     
  9. Samp1e

    Samp1e Senior Member

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    captian - shit is poppin with the force/drop effect thingy you did with it. not really feeling the M, isn't as fitting to the A or S (with the addons). the A could have a beefier right leg too
     
  10. dark2

    dark2 Senior Member

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    cold i like the 1st 1 but the second 1 not doing anything 4 me

    and i tryed 2 follow your advice and this is what i ended up doing

    View attachment 454

    there bad i know
     
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  11. noam12

    noam12 Senior Member

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    chill with the colors, the e looks like an uppercase L and the a looks like a backwords p. handstlyes not to bad haha. other than that simpler is better.mhm cleche words but the best words
     
  12. Mo152

    Mo152 Senior Member

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    pen died as i was doing it so thats whwy only one letter is inked lol but yea
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    cnc
     
  13. the end

    the end Senior Member

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    Tasty- my favorites are the 2 and 4. Left side of 2 could use less detail and yes, taller 't'.
    Mo-pretty neat looking, just not clicking for me though, I'm thinking pull your letters pretty close and see what that does for ya.

    For a bro of mine
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    I think everything but the 'w' is a little underdone, only the quotation marks aren't placed very well. the 'lock' I would add some more connecting action to match other side better. The shading on back 'r' leg has been added... What do you guys think?
     
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  14. silentchaos14

    silentchaos14 Elite Member

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    i see potential but i cant tell if u use bars or not. other then that just dont overlap as much
     
  15. dark2

    dark2 Senior Member

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    lots of potential keep it up
     
  16. the end

    the end Senior Member

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    Thanks :) first criticism I've gotten from other writers.
    Here's some much more clean I did a few days ago.
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    Man, just recently had one of those breakthroughs, made writing 100 times more fun
     
  17. silentchaos14

    silentchaos14 Elite Member

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    the bottom part of the E dont fit and the big extension on the R is weird
     
  18. *OsBaGoSh@

    *OsBaGoSh@ Member

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    end- i like your style = simple and the different letter sizes should be replicated through the whole piece

    mo- the top more but i think its jus cause you connected it otherwise cool

    Tasty- the second one

    capitan- i like the write and the s. the handstyle is silly

    Krazer- i like the top without the frillies

    Cold- work on keeping them the same size

    Morne - fix tat r

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    CRITZ!$!$!$
     
  19. dark2

    dark2 Senior Member

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    i really like the hypebeast


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    can't get the k and r 2 look good arg but what do you think?

    going bombing in a bit
     
  20. the end

    the end Senior Member

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    Hey dark I would suggest using bars to form your letters, simple and blocky. I found bubble to be a not so good starting point for me. Practice your handstyle too helps a ton... Just takes practice :)


    Hype- that all looks pretty nice, especialy the colouring, except its all kinda the same, id like to see some other styles from you. Also work on that handstyle a bit kinda etchy. Oh nice throwie too
     
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