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Discussion in 'Toys forum' started by Kayone707, Jun 15, 2005.

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  1. dark2

    dark2 Senior Member

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    so more like this ?
    View attachment 456

    but obviusly better i jus threw it 2gether quickly cause going out in a few
     
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  2. Mo152

    Mo152 Senior Member

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    thanx for the crits people...

    hyperbeast looks perrty good man, feelin the graveyard and the one after it.. some of your hype throws need some work tho

    dark not so much,, each letter consist of different parts when you make your letter make each part a bar of the same size and width as the next... theres a tut of letter progression somewhere on here try and find that
     
  3. Scare2

    Scare2 Senior Member

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    aye hypebeast. ur stuff looks like its streight out of an 80s newyork blackboook. its tight but try branchin out good simple stuff though. it really makes me think train. the last three or soo are by far better than the firsts

    dark no offense but thats whack. use bars of equal thickness and do simples like on ur keyboard. and i could be wrong but it looks like the D in ur first one got bit from the DRO throw a couple pages back. keep goin tho.
     
  4. Hyperactiveness?

    Hyperactiveness? Senior Member

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    Captain that shit is still pretty solid on my opinion
    Dark man keep trying man you remind me of my old days, I was shit then.. im still pretty shit now but s'all good in the long run.
    Mo your style doesnt appeal to me but dont take that too seriously its just me
    the end the R needs to come out more like in your "marcie" sketch and im not really feeling the W I feel everything else though good work.
    Hypebeast damn man Scare I second that! Straight new york old school style! Love it man I envy you! You even got "Hype" in your name. Makes me proud to be wearing the name I got.

    I got some shit to post but itll be awhile.. I do all this shit at another house. My family is too cheap ass to get a decent computer for the internet. Haha I cant even turn the fucking thing on anymore.
    BE BACK IN A BIT!
     
  5. dark2

    dark2 Senior Member

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    slowly getting a lil better lol but ill start trying 2 use bars and jus sketchin shit up and no affence taken i know its whack lol thanx for the crits and sugestions
     
  6. Sou - Mvd

    Sou - Mvd Senior Member

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    haha you know hypebeast isnt a good thing right?

    anyways

    hypebeast you need to work on your letters a lot. It's fun drawing full colour double pages but if I was you I'd put the markers away for a bit and just start working on busting out page after page of straightletters.
     
  7. inkbits

    inkbits Senior Member

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    dark2 ..trying to do the whole letter in one go can be like drunken urination, rather then trying to trace the whole letter from your mind use bars of the same thickness to construct the letter.

    *OsBaGoSh@ ..fourth one down is best of them imo. allthough it's bubbly style your letter proportion isn't too bad man in some places, you should work on your handstyle more to go with it if you attempt full pages like that.

    the end ..looks decent man but if you're going to connect letters you need carry that out in more then one place within a word imo to balance things out.

    Mo152 ..first one not bad, can tell the style you're attempting.

    Captain ..it's looks really rigid man, the M is heaps bendy then you sort of go more sharp and rigid as it goes along. also it's hard to split bars (like bottom of A and top of S) unless you split them in enough places and far enough into a letter to maintain the flow of the overall thing. you'd also need at least one split in every letter to use that imo.

    Dr. Kazer ..sketchy extensions on the first one looks allright, don't know the letters though. the arrow kind of kills the other imo man.

    c0ld ..old style looks a lot better imo.

    silentchaos14 ..would look better if the O was thinner and the R wider, bar thickness is good though man for blockbusting.

    Mr Tasty ..second is the most solid one, the extension under the E could flow out more imo though. also extension under the T is hard to make out where coming from, if it's coming directly from the S and not the T then it fits allright.

    capo93 ..top one looks cool. right side of the M kind of looked weird at first but made sense and works after looking at it a bit more. style at top of letters looks real familiar but don't know if I'm thinking of you anyway or seen somewhere else.

    kelio ..you should of used the red line on the paper to keep letter size proportioned.

    larsson719 ..the E looks allright but the D is a bit too bulbuss and round for the other two letters. also if you are going to use arrows you need to think about where they are coming from, something needs to generate the extension/arrow. you've got them coming from nowhere which looks out of place man.

    pez ss ..don't bump for crits so quickly. anyway sketch looks ok as an overall, the E is good, I'd say keep at it.

    Drakula ..the R is cool, you should try and keep that going throughout. the A looks kind of too skinny imo and your K would be good if a bit fatter like the style of the R.

    ASB_ONE ..looks good man, getting more flow going for sure. the G's rocking.

    Nem ..your posts are invisible.

    Eack ..the A and K match real well but the C and E look sort of out of place. the overall look of the sketch is not bad though, colours allright and background shit is not too over the top.

    DemonicKronik ..it kind of looks like your trying to produce a logo or something, I'd work on simple blocky stuff to get spacing and size down a bit more.

    exhale ..hard to make out actual letter structure for me but looks decent as a whole for shape etc. should try basic colour on that sort of structure.

    uhhh ..on point.

    StAtiK1 ..size is good and spacing allright for simples, keep at it.

    thesilentvandal ..I like it, on point.

    incomplete canvas so not pic deficient...
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  8. kelio

    kelio Senior Member

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    -Captain: shit looks ill. maybe change up the bottom left leg of the a though.
    -Mr Tasty: it all looks good but yeah second or Fourth
    -dark2: keep working those simples, use bars my friend.
    -Mo152's: will loook good if you clean it up a bit, keep letters the same height.
    -the end: tell your friend not to use extensions yet, his letter structure isn't ready for them, and you keep working on the bars, looks alrite so far.
    -*OsBaGoSh@:looks old school, not really feeling it but yeah just keep working on your letters, really like that elephant though.
    -inkbits: love that canvas, the color choice mmmm.

    heres what i got from yesterday. critz?
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  9. SLEDGEHAMMER

    SLEDGEHAMMER Senior Member

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  10. popshots

    popshots Senior Member

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  11. Nem

    Nem Elite Member

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    and what can i do about this?

    not suck so much?


    popshots, i would make the left side of that N a little fatter. not really feelin the lips on that charac.


    annnnd. the letter B can suck a cock.

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  12. Saeo1

    Saeo1 Senior Member

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    popshots- Feelin those letters just not the character.

    Nem- That S is wack. get ur letters more proportional, and if thats u says thats ur style than find a new style.

    Sledge- Not bad. but is that part under the M connected to the E or the M? whatever it is lose it.

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  13. douchebag4life

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  14. glass

    glass Senior Member

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    heh, i have a friend who writes Dice. anyway what you want to do is try and get your lines nice and clean. you're starting with simples which is good, stick doing those simple letters and block letters until you've got them down (one of the better members will let you know when you should move onto more complex stuff. also check out the new to graff section and try messing around with simple bars.
     
  15. Hyperactiveness?

    Hyperactiveness? Senior Member

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    Of course Sou. The guy definitely needs some letter structure work. But im just saying his color scheming and artwork depict that of the old style seen way back in new york.. like King Blade.
     
  16. silentchaos14

    silentchaos14 Elite Member

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    yeah go to the new 2 graff thread and learn bars. learn those then post again
     
  17. Mr Tasty

    Mr Tasty Banned

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    yea thx for the advice everyone...i painted the 4th one today...
    the 2nd one woulda looked bad in the spot i was painting in
    il post pics in the paint thread later
     
  18. sex without condoms

    sex without condoms Elite Member

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  19. AVID1

    AVID1 Senior Member

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    Sex without condoms: interesting style. personally I would have added a background or something. Try drawing a goofy elephant or something.
     
  20. c0ld

    c0ld Senior Member

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    inkbits-thats really nice, be sure to post more flicks

    kelio-its improving. id say work on the C. angle the "arms" one the ends of the letter out wider

    sledge-nice. clean it and ink it.

    nem-its nice, but what did you draw that on? did u do the black urself? if so, take it out, i think.

    sex-uhm....weird lol. work on those Es. honestly, i dunno what to say, lol.


    some stuff i worked on last night.

    writing my old name again. sorry for the coloration on the first one. almost out of pink.
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    ignore the coloration on these
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    this ones colored pretty bad. it was kinda dark.
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    critz plz?