ilikepie- its pretty nice. I'm not a fan of r's with their right legs going upwards like that but that's just preference. if anything try to start braching out more. do some more cuts, fuck with the extentions, you know the drill. oh yeah and i personally would lose the inverted cross. dont get me wrong, i worship satan twice daily, but theyre pretty played by now. peace! bers- concentrate on your first one. it would be perfect if your s wasnt so fat and your e's structure was more normalized. daylo- its not the worst throw ive seen, but basically all you can do to improve on throws is, like i tell everyone, look at other throws.