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Discussion in 'Toys forum' started by Kayone707, Jun 15, 2005.

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  1. Skope2

    Skope2 Senior Member

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    Tried something new with the top bar, not sure if i like it. What you think? Not finished obviously.
     

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  2. ChronicKush

    ChronicKush Member

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    First time postingg hereee.
    Shof i like it just a little overboard on the extensions.
    you guys have any crits for this?
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  3. ribcage

    ribcage Banned

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    @shof dont put 3d over your letters like where the s connects to the H. Also you should tone the extensions down for now cause all those look wack
    @skope yo i guess conceptually that aint bad since you used your bars and your width is consistant (for the most part), but the whole top bar as 1 bar is pretty lame, would you actually paint something like that? anyways doin the top bar as 1 bar makes your N look unrecognizable, the left bar of it looks like an l or I at first glance...
    @chronickush scratch all the add ons for now...work on that tag too...and where is smokesville usa

    anyways started this 1 today... gonna fix my shit and post it while still in pencil later so yall can crit it...lookin pretty beat up at the moment tho
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  4. sir.to.you.

    sir.to.you. Senior Member

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    shofs. extensions on the top look dope
    skope. that top bar shit iv always liked black and white that shit
    kid gave me a word at work what do you think.
    and iv been fuckin around with theos i know this is fucked but i love the name for some reason

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  5. Cl4sh

    Cl4sh Senior Member

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    Skope- Can't tell what that 4th letters supposed to be.
    Reach- I don't like how the bottom left bar of your R gets thinner as it goes up.
    Sir- That S looks like a backwards Z, which I know is an S, but when I look at it, it just screams Z

    I suck
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  6. ian

    ian Elite Member

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    ^that A is decent, but lose that little curve on the bottom right. the rest are no good, can't even really crit them because they're just not good and theres not really anything you can do to them to make them any better besides erasing them and starting over
     
  7. FlatScank

    FlatScank Banned

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    thought I'd try out a lower-case "a"
     

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  8. pointman

    pointman Senior Member

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    Okay i think i prefer the capital A if you just tweaked this sketch it could be sick.
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    Just lose the L extention and do the T with out the bottom curl going up into the top bar of the T makes it look too much like a B. Also just move it together abit.
    Your fill reminds me of a friend i lost he used to do african tribal style stuff with swirls and weird dots was steez, stay up man
     
  9. ribcage

    ribcage Banned

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    @clash yo thats actually a step in the right direction. you used bars! way to go dude, do that 1 again but make your bars connect smoothly because right now the letters look weird like the bottom left of the C top of the A and middle left of the S. connect your shit up so all the bars make 1 after you erase the pencil ya digg? the extension on the L is kinda pointless at this point, and the bottom bar of the L is lookin pretty bad... and the middle bar of the H needs to be a bar not 2 little dashes like you can do on a throw. Last thing is your bar width, its actually pretty consistent except for the bottom bar of C.... its gettin better breh
     
  10. Cl4sh

    Cl4sh Senior Member

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    Thanks for the crits.
    Feeling lazy, So I dropped the H. Scanned crooked, not drawn like that.


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  11. Skope2

    Skope2 Senior Member

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    Flat - I'd definately stick with that capital A, it looks better than the lower case one.
    Clash - that all seems a bit out of proportion. The bits coming off of the C and L are too stubby in comparison to the length of those vertical bars.

    Just a couple of quick ones
     

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  12. Cl4sh

    Cl4sh Senior Member

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    Skope- The O looks like a lowercase E. Also not feeling the top right part of that K.
     
  13. ViniVidiVici

    ViniVidiVici Senior Member

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    Flat - your letter are not defined, the L looks like a B along with your T, the A just isn't appealing, and the F looks like a D or a T, your sketches have too much confusion in them, your adding extensions without really thinking about them and how they will affect the letters. Go simpler.

    Clash - basically what Skope said, your letters are very stubby horizontally speaking.

    Skope - I like the S and E in the second one but that is about all I can say, the O does look like an E and the Ks are goofy.
     
  14. Skope2

    Skope2 Senior Member

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    Cheers for the crits guys. Decided to scrap that style altogether and think up a new one.. Just a sketch right now but would appreciate any thing you can spot that needs tweaking. reads SCOPE.
     

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  15. Dcicfhbimv

    Dcicfhbimv Senior Member

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    Scope-Idk exactly what it is but the middle 3 letters don't feel right in the piece the p sorta looks like a backwards 4 and the c idk I just am not vibing with it. and the o is way to thin and by contrast just looks strange. I'm digging the s and the e though. Im unsure about the extension on the back of the e though overall the letter looks pretty nice.
    And as far as the red piece from your last post I like it all but the o kinda looks like an e.
     
  16. Gatsoi

    Gatsoi Senior Member

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  17. Cl4sh

    Cl4sh Senior Member

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    What's up with that little extention thing on your M? Not feelin it.
     
  18. ViniVidiVici

    ViniVidiVici Senior Member

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    Ya I think ya should've ended it like the N, it would've been some nice symmetry
     
  19. Cl4sh

    Cl4sh Senior Member

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    And what kind of markers are those? They is sexy
     
  20. SR_cpc

    SR_cpc New Member

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    been writing for about 4 years still have work to put in until i can get respect but i would love feedback...

    part 2
     

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