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Discussion in 'Toys forum' started by Kayone707, Jun 15, 2005.

1. SaverfltMember

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tried to outline my tag after fucking up earlier pieces. Crits?

2. PUTSElite Member

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Bump this

3. ESONE.Senior Member

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Stuck piece:

- flow of u is getting there, I like that kinda style, but the end bit is to exaggerated
-t doesn't fit
Overall- I think the clean bars are working for you, now it's just experimenting with bar width to get flow

4. Koda01Senior Member

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cleaner lines would look a lot better.. also, it's kinda weird because the first letters are simple and the last two are kinda complex.. besides that, you barely see the v.

5. SuburbanTurbanElite Member

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Looking good grosm, maybe abit too many unnecessary extensions in the second post but it's good to experiment! it's a common learning curve

Saver I agree with koda

Puts that's looking nice, just keep making it cleaner and cleaner and experiment too

Been a minute since I've drawn criticism appreciated..pen sketches so there not the cleanest

6. Bt98Senior Member

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Thanks man. I kinda figured there were too many. That's alright though, it'll come with practice. Glad its not too bad. Gonna get some serious practice in after this week (finals and I'm moving=no real time for graff), I'll be sure to keep posting and trying to progress. Your stuffs always fresh man. My only crit is the m on the first one is kinda lost to me, looks like an O and an N. Maybe just me though

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7. lse292Senior Member

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8. SuburbanTurbanElite Member

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Yehh busy time with priorities lol I tryed looping that one leg of the m over its self sorta but it does look lost lol,
thanks man
^looks cool, fix your letter\bar proprotioning though especially with the top of the g leaning over its self like that, looks off to me. Try throwing a drop shadow or 3D on it next time

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9. PUTSElite Member

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Thanks all of you for the crits now I have another piece haha

10. lse292Senior Member

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11. "ZOALZ"Senior Member

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seems a bit complex in my opinion, try a more simplified version...

like the octopuses face... hahaaa

and is that only 6 arms.. does that make it a hexopus

12. "ZOALZ"Senior Member

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ayy... that as my hundredth post <3

13. Bt98Senior Member

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I think it would make it a hexapus, that only makes sense

14. lse292Senior Member

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v2 Crit plz

15. ESONE.Senior Member

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10 min flex on "k"

16. SaverfltMember

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Straight letter Crits ?

17. Dean44Member

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You got a lot going on in that picture. Size your letters down make the fit the page, cool character idea. and for that grey as a backdrop idea maybe do a quick drop shadow instead, would look better. keep up

18. Dean44Member

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