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Discussion in 'Toys forum' started by Fube, Apr 10, 2008.
Does it say Fran or eran?
Sooo I think this is my first post ever... CRITS PLEASE!
This one I like the dots, makes it kinda even I think...(i hate the E)
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This one I took the dots and made it even on both sides, better E here.
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Simple throw, no Idea what I was doing with the accents on it...
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Not sure could be a throw, showing some just simple blocks and such.
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And last but not least a more colorful and smoother throw, different F
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Yea that's it, CRITS PLEASE! Sorry if there's image problems or they're too big, thanks guys!
you're right about the first E, drop it, the other Es look decent.
though you're OKAY at making letters. you always make your letters too shaky and/or make one bigger than the rest. Often it's your K or the bar coming off of the K... and your S.
Try consistency in the E and F... they both have two top extensions... that's just 1 bar away from being the same letter, so If they have some similarity I think it would look dope. That's just me. Because that's really what makes your style YOURS, not just random shapes, something that you can associate or identify is done by a certain writer.
Sometimes your extensions are too little, try making the letters a little less fat and a bit taller. Mix things up,
Thanks for all the helpful advice. that wasnt an attempt at an Answer bite. I just did a few other A's and my friends who better at throws by leaps and bounds just told me no, so i was just trying. But thank you for all the help.
Also it's fran.
aye aye, you're welcome. just remember to use it
throwies are quite amazing and fun once you get them down. and you can play with letter structure in an abstract way also. but that's later on
I don't my I posted it for my brother, I still write azule
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Azule: TRy making the top of your A flat so it matches the rest of your letters
and don't bother putting the drop shadow in yet, master your throw first
Azule, your Z needs to flow a little better. Maybe make the bottom bar a little thicker. Also for the entire thing maybe try making all the edges a little softer.
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Fixed the F. Rounded the edges and move it back a little. Made it more F like. Kept the R. Changed the A and went with a capitol N.
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New to the site need crits please.
im digging everything but the a man, that little bulge on the right bottom bar, make it match hight wise with eh s bulge. and the line that goes up on the s cut taht in half its too long. and the line that goes horizontal throwugh the s, make it match with the line that goes through the e
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tea drinker that nice i like it
paser the p an e are alright but the as needs work
tasr thats solid except your sr is alot bigger then your ta an lose the crown
jus started sketchin again. nothin impressive. my e is ugly. eh crits?
pase you missed a shadow on the bottom of the e too homie
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new name crits?
Kaw: I think you should define that 'K' a bit more.
Different -A- and different -S-
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Better -A- and -S- ??
whats up.. been lurking around BS for a while now, this is my first post. here are a couple fills that i've done in the past few days. looking for some crits and ways to improve and so forth. i have been playing around on paper for a while and this week picked up some cans and started practicing in a stairwell in my yard. any advice is appreciated.
toy throwbattle yall!
toy throwup battle callout
Rules:No digital modifications,color is your choice,one entry per person and all entries must be on paper.
Pm all your entries to Smooth_nuts
workin on shit...
Thatguywhodrinkstea- pretty damn sweet yo..
Azule-definitely work on it..
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Paser- Looks pretty solid.
Posek- Real nice
Separate names with a comma.