Just... don't do that, man. That swoosh thing in all of your letters. Just knock that down a couple of pegs, and make the holes in your B and R more, like, evenly distributed.
You need to use bars to make your letters, and that blue shit around the letters need to go, you should also work on your 3D
its not so much the b cause that was just an accidental fuck up i need to work on my R's' your M looks like and E your O looks like the number 8 o.o
ima redraw it to do a bigger piece with colors...crits and tips are DEEPLY appreciated!!! View attachment 569291
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mfatik- top one lose the awkword bend in the right leg of the a and bring the middle bar over and connect it. bottom one you got more unneccessary extenstions and you need to make the left leg of the a connect to the right one at the top. Meph-my tip, dont mess it up kew- dude that shit was like one the top of the last page, i didn't not get crits because nobody saw it...we all saw it it didn't get crits cause nobody was tripping face on mushrooms. Im gonna go with whoever said it just looks like a bunch of boomerangs shaded at diffrent levels...thats my crit.
Yeah, kew, you're definitely trying to hard on that one. The structure just isn't there. Stick to working with bars until you understand proportions, then shoot for a more advanced style. Meph, I'd definitely rework your E on the top one and play around with the layout of the pieces around your letters before you make a final colored one. The car looks pretty good, but I'd work on getting the letters in the smoke to be the same sizes too. Mfatik, on the top one, those kinks in your letters make the entire thing look kinda awkward, but nice job keeping the letters proportionate. I'd stay away from overlapping like you did on your F and on the left side of your M though. On the bottom one, stay away from disconnecting portions of letters like your A and also don't connect your letters like you did on your M and F. Aside from that, I'd bring your letters closer together and don't be afraid to overlap. Here's a sketch I finished last night for a buddy of mine (his idea lol):